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Uneven Still by ~DisguisedAgenda:iconDisguisedAgenda:

Categories Literature > Poetry > General Poetry > Open


The sun's echoes are lost
  in the still silver water.

The ripples play effects
  on stray eyes;
                  eyes that wonder.

The sun's echoes are lost (half of the time),
  absorbed by the darkness
of an overcasted shade.

Reflections are broken (half of the time) -
  an abstract view
                  to eyes that wander.

The sun's echoes are broken;
  scattered by the uneven,
still uneven water

which is still only half of the time.
©2005-2009 ~DisguisedAgenda
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~ChiMG Jul 14, 2005, 7:26:07 PM
very interesting chris, i like it a lot good woork very well writen

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~DisguisedAgenda Jul 14, 2005, 7:30:26 PM
lol really, you think? Thats awesome, but it will go unnoticed lol. All my poems go unnoticed lol. Thanks for the encouraging words and fav lolol. You're opinion matters most.

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~MasterRambler Jul 14, 2005, 7:41:11 PM
Oooo... interesting style... I'm terrible at commenting on written works because I have no idea what I'm talking about ._.;; Despite this, I love it ^^ Very well written and very appealing to read

Nicely done *claps* :D

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~WarriorAlien Jul 14, 2005, 7:42:34 PM
This is definitely a good style for you. It takes a person that understands poetry and has the patience to put meaning to their words to come up with work like this. I enjoy writing poetry with thought otherwise it's just words on a page. This is an awesome poem! Keep up the sweet work! B-)

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~AellaWind Jul 14, 2005, 7:47:44 PM
That was very very interesting... too deep for me to understand the true meaning... but I did notice all the contradictions... very intruiging poem... I enjoyed it.

:-)

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When you love someone... you just know.

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~DisguisedAgenda Jul 14, 2005, 7:49:46 PM
Thanks for the awesome comment! This poem I think has potential... I need more exposure lol.

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Some people are a lot like Slinkies - They're not really good for anything, but they still bring a smile to your face when you push them down a flight of stairs.
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!2WhiteOleanders2U Jul 14, 2005, 7:53:28 PM
the depth of this poem is absolutely amazing. your words describe the setting well. i agree with Mike... its daily deviation and favorite material.

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~DisguisedAgenda Jul 14, 2005, 8:00:12 PM
Wow, thanks for the lovely comment. Thanks for the fav as well as the encouraging words :) I don't think this poem will be recognized though. Recognition on dA for writers is hard lol. Thanks again :)

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Some people are a lot like Slinkies - They're not really good for anything, but they still bring a smile to your face when you push them down a flight of stairs.
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